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Postby TechnoGoth » Wed Mar 03, 2004 1:18 am

I finally got around to finishing the rewrite of chapters 1 and 2 of Zodiac they are available for reading at
http://technogoth-r.tripod.com/zodiac_part_i.htm

for those who read the orignal versions these new versions are more or less the same, but rewitten in the first person as well as I fixed many of the errors and improved the quality of the writing in several parts.

hope people enjoy them.
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Postby Adriac » Wed Mar 03, 2004 2:03 am

Waah, first person :(

;)

I shan't critique the story, some of you know how I feel about tech fiction- but you messed up the person in a couple places I saw, and the tense appears to flipflop. Be careful with that in the future, grammatical inconsistencies stick out like a sore thumb for most people, and can ruin an otherwise fine suspension of disbelief :)
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Postby sweaty bob » Wed Mar 03, 2004 8:56 am

i remeber that story it was good is that the whole one i read the first one you made about a year ago.

: ( ive read both of them on that site already damn.
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Postby TechnoGoth » Wed Mar 03, 2004 9:57 pm

Hmm, seems I posted an old version of chapter 1 by mistake the correct one is up.

yup those are same parts I posted last year,  I thought I'd remind people of it and build up anticaption for part 3
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Postby sweaty bob » Wed Mar 03, 2004 10:12 pm

i still kinda remeber it im going to print off page 3 so i can read it in bed/school etc.

<edit> lol were is part 3 o.0 </edit>

(Edited by sweaty bob at 9:13 pm on Mar. 3, 2004)
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Postby tzulawski » Thu Mar 04, 2004 8:59 am

waiting for part 3 now hope it's as good as the first 2

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